Blog Challenge 2017

Blog Challenge 2017

Friday, January 20, 2017

Freedom – #FiveSentenceFiction

I'm joining in with Vinitha Dileep's Five Sentence Fiction challenge this week with the prompt of "Freedom."


It's not that easy to make a complete story in five sentences but I like the challenge to make those words count.

At first, my sentences were long winded and wordy but I decided to slash them down to the basic essence which gave it a totally different effect.




FREEDOM

Not guilty. Twenty years in jail, wrongly accused. DNA evidence had finally cleared Jim. Tears of joy and long awaited embraces. Freedom at last! 

14 comments:

  1. Wow! Now that's an impressive five sentence fiction, Cat! It's been ages since I participated in one. My sentences tend to get long and winding. I guess I ought to try doing it again; your fiction piece sure is motivating!

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    1. Thanks a lot, Shilpa. It's a real challenge to pare it down to the basics and still keep the meaning. I like giving it a try though. Thanks for the encouragement. Maybe you'd like to try it, too, when Vinitha has her weekly prompt.

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  2. That's pretty awesome. I feel that it took 20 years but freedom at last.

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  3. This is like a life story in 5 sentences! I think I will like to try this challenge considering I just go on and on... 😀

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    1. Hope you can join Vinitha's challenge, too, Inderpreet. I do find writing a story in Five sentences is not as easy as it seems. I tried to cut it way down and keep the meaning which was also very challenging.

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    1. Awww, thanks, Vidya. Appreciate the support. Hugs to you, too.

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  5. Short and crisp... Well written Cat

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  6. Beautiful story expressed in a few words! I love how you used the apt words to paint the whole story capturing all the emotions. Brilliant, Cat. Thank you for joining me. :)

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    1. Thanks for the challenge, Vinitha. I like trying to do fiction like that where you have to make every word count. Look forward to this week's challenge, too.

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  7. Long and touching story- in just a few words:-) Awesome, Cat:-)

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  8. Wow, Cathy, this was so awesomely done. So few words yet so powerful. I tend towards using longer sentences since technically we can use five sentences but you've shown why we need not. 20 years of jail for a crime you haven't done is so, so sad. But, freedom is sweet. Always. Glad he had his family to welcome him.

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