Freedom – #FiveSentenceFiction

I'm joining in with Vinitha Dileep's Five Sentence Fiction challenge this week with the prompt of "Freedom."


It's not that easy to make a complete story in five sentences but I like the challenge to make those words count.

At first, my sentences were long winded and wordy but I decided to slash them down to the basic essence which gave it a totally different effect.




FREEDOM

Not guilty. Twenty years in jail, wrongly accused. DNA evidence had finally cleared Jim. Tears of joy and long awaited embraces. Freedom at last! 

Comments

  1. Shilpa GupteJanuary 20, 2017 at 5:55 AM

    Wow! Now that's an impressive five sentence fiction, Cat! It's been ages since I participated in one. My sentences tend to get long and winding. I guess I ought to try doing it again; your fiction piece sure is motivating!

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    1. UnknownJanuary 23, 2017 at 8:44 AM

      Thanks a lot, Shilpa. It's a real challenge to pare it down to the basics and still keep the meaning. I like giving it a try though. Thanks for the encouragement. Maybe you'd like to try it, too, when Vinitha has her weekly prompt.

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  2. ParulJanuary 20, 2017 at 6:54 AM

    That's pretty awesome. I feel that it took 20 years but freedom at last.

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  3. IndywritesJanuary 20, 2017 at 8:10 AM

    This is like a life story in 5 sentences! I think I will like to try this challenge considering I just go on and on... 😀

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    1. UnknownJanuary 23, 2017 at 8:44 AM

      Hope you can join Vinitha's challenge, too, Inderpreet. I do find writing a story in Five sentences is not as easy as it seems. I tried to cut it way down and keep the meaning which was also very challenging.

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  4. Vidya SuryJanuary 21, 2017 at 11:04 PM

    Beautiful! Hugs, Cat!

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    1. UnknownJanuary 23, 2017 at 8:45 AM

      Awww, thanks, Vidya. Appreciate the support. Hugs to you, too.

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  5. RajlakshmiJanuary 22, 2017 at 1:15 PM

    Short and crisp... Well written Cat

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  6. VinithaJanuary 23, 2017 at 8:25 AM

    Beautiful story expressed in a few words! I love how you used the apt words to paint the whole story capturing all the emotions. Brilliant, Cat. Thank you for joining me. :)

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    1. UnknownJanuary 23, 2017 at 8:46 AM

      Thanks for the challenge, Vinitha. I like trying to do fiction like that where you have to make every word count. Look forward to this week's challenge, too.

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  7. UnknownJanuary 24, 2017 at 12:53 PM

    Long and touching story- in just a few words:-) Awesome, Cat:-)

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  8. UmaJanuary 26, 2017 at 7:44 PM

    Wow, Cathy, this was so awesomely done. So few words yet so powerful. I tend towards using longer sentences since technically we can use five sentences but you've shown why we need not. 20 years of jail for a crime you haven't done is so, so sad. But, freedom is sweet. Always. Glad he had his family to welcome him.

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