100 Words on a Saturday - May 10

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Here is my take on the prompt "She realized that she could no longer hide the truth" for the 100 words on a Saturday challenge. 

“I’m Brianna, your daughter.”


Noreen stared at the young woman standing in the doorway, her cornflower blue eyes and curly brown hair almost identical to her own. For twenty years she had longed to know about the baby she had been forced to give up for adoption when she got pregnant at sixteen. How heartbroken she had been at having to make the decision. If only things had been different.


Her husband Luke appeared beside her, a questioning look on his face.


Noreen swallowed and cleared her throat several times. She realized that she could no longer hide the truth.

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  1. Aah! Hope all was well and they lived happily ever after!! :)

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    1. I hope so, too, Shilpa. Thanks for commenting!

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  2. And am sure the burden from her heart of all those years must have been lifted :) Glad she took the decision to come out in the open with the truth. Nice take.

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  3. Ohh.. You left me there in suspense.. :)

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    1. Yes, it was a tense moment, wasn't it? Thanks for commenting.

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  4. An emotional take on the prompt. Loved it.

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  5. Love it - I wonder how he took the news?

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    1. Hopefully he was compassionate. Thanks for commenting, Laurel!

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  6. This is almost exactly as it happened to a friend. Good emotion and suspense.

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    1. Must be a very emotional moment for sure. Thanks for stopping in Carol.

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  7. Hope they all look into the brighter side of the situation and live happily everafter....lovely!!!

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    1. Yes, hope her hubs is understanding. Thanks, Shelly.

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  8. I hope it all ends well and mother and daughter get a new chance at life together!

    A single step towards change

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    1. I like to think it does and that her hubby is understanding. Thanks, Nabanita.

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  9. I smell healing of two women underway! Great story idea Cat!

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    1. Thanks for stopping by, Rumpy! You're such a discerning doggie!

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  10. This is awesome that they have found each other again! Hopefully they can now develop the relationship they should have always had. Great story! ♥

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  11. I'm glad they connected. I hope Luke turns out to be a nice guy! :)

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    1. Me, too, Corinne. I like to think he would be understanding. Thanks for commenting.

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  12. Great story. Sounds like a true life story about a friend of mine.

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    1. Must be very emotional to go through the experience, but rewarding, too. Thanks for commenting, Talya.

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  13. Now that I've read your post and the comments, do you generally flesh this out and create a longer story line or do you keep this for the files, to being back maybe later when you're stuck and need something to move a story forward?

    I'm learning - so if you can picture it, I'm pulling the tops of my ears towards the screen in anticipation of your perspective!!

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    1. EEK! Don't pull the tops of your ears off! Hehehe!

      The way I understand these prompts is that we just write what comes to mind and describe a moment in time. 100 words is fairly short to do much fleshing out but I do wonder how her husband reacted to the news.

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  14. Yikes! That's bound to be an awkward moment, but hopefully, it has a happy ending. Great short story!

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