She wished she knew then what she knew now
I love these 100 words on a Saturday challenges over at Write Tribe. It's always fun to write one and to read what other writers come up with.
They are such a great exercise in making every single word count. I'm certainly much more aware of using filler words after Corinne Rodrigue's great article accompanying last Saturday's prompt about filler words to avoid. I never realized how much I overuse all those words so now when I use one, I quickly delete it.
The prompt this week is: She wished she knew then what she knew now.
Jenna adjusted the itchy blonde wig over her brown hair and
put on oversized sunglasses. Luckily the heavy makeup covered most of the
bruises.
Carrying her battered suitcase, she limped towards the bus queue,
clutching her ticket in her trembling hand. She wasn’t sure where this bus was headed
but she didn’t care. As long as it was
far away from Max, that was good enough. He would never find her. She would change
her name and start a new life elsewhere.
She wished she knew then what she knew now.
Great story. I am sure this happens more than one would think! It is sad that anyone would even have to consider running away to hide and become someone else to be safe.
ReplyDeleteBrought back memories :( Very good, gripping story
ReplyDeleteAh, the destruction caused by abuse. How many women fall prey to good looks and charm, only to find the monster beneath. A tragic tale, told with finesse, Cathy.
ReplyDeleteYes, every word counted... Griping and tight indeed. Hope this never happens to anyone in real life...
ReplyDeleteGripping tale and so well-written. Kudos!
ReplyDeleteA sweet short fiction.
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad she got away! A very powerful piece, Cat!
ReplyDeleteHow painful! But its always better to break free that to be silently endure!
ReplyDeleteI love it, Cat! Hugs. Great ending. Or beginning, eh?
ReplyDeleteSometimes you got to do what you have to do to survive. I am glad she escaped. Great story! ♥
ReplyDeleteThis is a new beginning, Cathy !! Loved her decision !
ReplyDeleteu have brought out her pain and determination to start afresh so well!
ReplyDeleteAmazingly written on her quest for freedom and human dignity. That's how it should be.
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Pain makes some people stronger. Glad she faced it and ran away. Running is not wrong, it is better than facing abuse every day. Powerful message.
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